Part I Writing
Doing Shopping Online
With the development of the Internet, shopping is no longer a tiring thing. Just click your mouse to choose the articles you like, and the purchase is done. You don"t even have to step out of the room. It seems all easy and quick.
However, people"s opinions vary on this trend. Some believe that on line shopping is time and money saving. With plentiful selection options, they can buy whatever they like at any time convenient. Still others insist that mis-purchasing alone is annoying enough, not to mention the credibility of the sellers and the safety of their accounts.
In my opinion, the convenience and excitement of on line shopping is beyond all doubts. In the meantime, we must always bear in mind that certain traps do exist, so we"d better make sure the sellers are trustworthy before buying. In addition, we should also guard ourselves from the potential hackers who might steal our account information.
1. 文章构造上，能看得出该同窗试图采纳谈论文的“三段式”（提出成绩、剖析成绩、处理成绩）。 然而，以“With the development of the Internet”为开首语，有些落入俗套，有硬套模板的嫌疑。稍加留意，应该能写出更好的句子。
2. 宏观言语点方面，有些语句稍显啰嗦，比方With plentiful selection options… 简化成With plentiful selections… 更好，意思没有丝毫减损，表白力反而加强许多。
Nowadays, can we find a person who has not experienced online shopping? Definitely not. Online shopping is coming into fashion in most of cities due to the rapid development of internet technology.
Online shopping is welcomed by most people due to various reasons. From the perspective of consumer, it can save some time for people who don’t have much spare time. Just click the mouse, they can get whatever they want while staying at home. For the retailers, it can cut some costs for those who don’t have much circulating funds. They don’t have to rent a house and spend money on employees compared with the traditional trade mode. However, there are still some defects in online shopping. First, face to face deal makes online shopping less reliable and trustworthy. Second, people will lose the fun of bargain.
It is undeniable that shopping on the internet has become an irresistible trend in modern society. It’s of great urgency that we need to regulate the relative laws in accordance with the rapid growth of online shopping. Only in this way can we enjoy the pleasure and convenience of online shopping without the concern of being treated.
点评：本次四级作文讨论的是最近的热点话题之一——互联网网 购。目前网购的风行水平是家喻户晓，因而，考生关于该话题还是比拟相熟的。然而，比拟非凡的是，题干所列出的要求的是考生从一个主观的角度来论述该话题， 而不是简略陈说本人的意见。所以，考生该当审分明题，在写作时不只仅要列出网购的优点，还必需给出相应的缺陷。
第 二段考生该当从正反两方面来阐述网购，辨别铺陈其优缺陷；对于优点，网购的优点很多，考生可择其最突出明显的方面来论述，比方说网购能够节省很多工夫；网 购能够节省很多老本开销等；其次，缺陷方面考生能够把重心放在诚信方面；为了不至于跟优点相比，缺陷方面太轻，考生能够思考略微提一下其余缺陷，比方说与 传统购物相比，网购少去了很多砍价的乐趣；
Online shopping has been a boon to many industries and companies looking to expand their markets. Also, it"s convenient for shoppers who are too busy to leave the house. However, in some cases nothing can replace a true face to face shopping experience.
Internet shopping is convenient for the mothers who spend all day doing house chores and for the fathers who work a full-time job. On the other hand, there are limits to shopping online, for example: guessing the correct size of clothing on a computer screen can be very frustrating.
For the busy mother and father, online shopping is a very useful and convenient tool. But, there are instances, like clothes shopping, where nothing beats the real thing.
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